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Post by Sinclair on Apr 10, 2006 4:28:12 GMT
CHAPTER 2
”All fighters enable after burn’s at my mark, mark!”
The fighters went into assault formation and enabled after burns, but it could already be too late. Moments later the fighters got the transport in visual range.
“To all raiders, shut down your engines and be prepared to be captured, resistance is meaningless. I repeat, shut down your engines and stay put”
As no surprise the raiders went to attack delta wing. The wing went back to wedge formation.
“All fighters, mark targets and break off to attack”
“Roger that” all the fighters confirmed
Delta wing crushed the raiders, since they were better equipped and better trained, but suddenly a carrier warped out from a wormhole. Dozen of raiders launched out of it and attacked delta wing. Delta wing fought back hard, but it wasn’t enough. The raiders were too many and delta wing was forced to pull back. But suddenly, a new wormhole opened up.
To be continued
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Post by Sinclair on Apr 10, 2006 4:28:32 GMT
what u think?? again
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RequinBeta4
Dark Jedi
ex-Master
Any fool may attack and die. Not all can prepare, counterattack, and eradicate.
Posts: 125
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Post by RequinBeta4 on Apr 10, 2006 12:28:10 GMT
Good introduction, let's see a plot line develoup!
Again, see if you can make longer chapters, an ideal length for a chapter would be 1 + 2 + 1/2 of a chapter IMHO, so you can leave a cliffhanger at end of chapter.
FYI, to not spam the board, put all the chapters in one topic, and just reply to your own topic with a new post when u havae a chapter done
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Post by Raven on Apr 11, 2006 7:08:39 GMT
looks nice.
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